The main characters are josh, Tiffani, Jessica, and me we are going to a graveyard because we are visiting our grandparents and some zombies came out of the ground and took Tiffani and Jessica in to a hole. Josh and I try to save them but these two zombies bite us in the neck. Two girls come out of nowhere and give us an antidote to heal us and the antidotes worked then we jumped in to the hole and fight the zombies. Then a bunch of zombies surrounded us but we find two baseball bats and hit the zombies. Then four lions that were bitten by zombies come out of nowhere and attack us and we try to run but I trip and josh finds a car. Then josh gets into the car and he runs over the lions. We went back to the hole to see if Tiffani and Jessica where ok. They where but they both just had a big cut on there arm and after that we went home. When we went home we told our parents what happened but they didn’t believe us so they went to the graveyard but there was nothing their. But our parents didn’t believe us. The End P.S. I’m never going into a graveyard again.
Questions for Peer Reviewers
1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)? I don't think this is original, because there are many movies and books about zombies.
2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? There is no complex between characters and there is not enough tension. It's just that two characters get pulled in to a hole by zombies.
3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? In this story, there is not much of description of characters. Add more of personality to them.
4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you see and hear and experience the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story? I think you could add more detail about the zombies (what they did and what they look like), how Josh and 'I' found the bats and car, and description of what the cut looked like.
5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author? You'll need more description throughout the whole story. Also, you'll need a better introduction and add who are the two girls. Are they Tiffany and Jessica? Or are they different characters?
ISKL DONG YEUP
1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?
2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?
3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?
4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you see and hear and experience the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?
5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?
1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?
2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?
3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?
4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you see and hear and experience the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?
5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?
P.S. I’m never going into a graveyard again.
Questions for Peer Reviewers
1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?
I don't think this is original, because there are many movies and books about zombies.
2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?
There is no complex between characters and there is not enough tension. It's just that two characters get pulled in to a hole by zombies.
3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?
In this story, there is not much of description of characters. Add more of personality to them.
4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you see and hear and experience the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?
I think you could add more detail about the zombies (what they did and what they look like), how Josh and 'I' found the bats and car, and description of what the cut looked like.
5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?
You'll need more description throughout the whole story. Also, you'll need a better introduction and add who are the two girls. Are they Tiffany and Jessica? Or are they different characters?
ISKL DONG YEUP
1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?
2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?
3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?
4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you see and hear and experience the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?
5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?
1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) What suggestions do you have for the author(s)?
2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?
3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?
4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you see and hear and experience the story? What details would you like to see in the next revision of the story?
5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? What suggestions do you have for the author?